You MUST edit down the text on this board. Consider that you will be there to discuss the details of your intent and your strategy. You must only include on the board the elements of your project that are absolutely necessary to understanding your general argument. The images and your conversations will fill out the rest. Pick the sentences/phrases out of the existing text that make up your main idea. Anything anecdotal or peripheral should be left as a sidenote to discuss with critics.
The board should serve to bring someone up to speed while you speak. If there is too much information on the board there might as well be none, because critics won't waste their time, they will just look at the images, assume what the project is and then ask you for the rest. You want there to be enough information to get them on board, but not any more.
As for the images, I think they are a little flat right now. I would use the board as an opportunity to call out what design decisions you have made so far, and how they become manifested in the form. Why is the rack the shape/size/material/structure that it is. Use a highlight color to bring attention to these decisions. THAT is what you want feedback on.
Eliminating text will give you more room to show these things.
See you Monday!